What If? Metropolis - Online Greenlight Review 2

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  1. tutorphil24 November 2017 at 08:23

    OGR 24/11/2017

    Hi George,

    Okay - so my first impression of this scene is that it's more thumbnail than final (which you suggest in your OGR) and also that things are under-conceptualised. I think what's missing - and what's been missing all along - is a sense that you are thinking like Ernst is thinking and that there's a reason why things look the way they do and also why we're looking at what's in your scene. Just a quick look at this link describing his key preoccupations helps me show you what I mean:

    http://www.theartstory.org/artist-ernst-max.htm

    So - an artist traumatised by war: an artist who works closely with the ideas of Freud: an artist interested in the art of the mentally ill... all of these ideas associate with your aesthetic, which is dark and nightmarish and neurotic, but Ernst also used particular techniques. I don't know how you evolved your mushroom-like thumbnails, but I'd still encourage you to take on the techniques of your artist - so for example, Frottage:

    http://www.tate.org.uk/art/art-terms/f/frottage

    and automatism:
    http://www.tate.org.uk/art/art-terms/a/automatism

    and grattage:
    http://www.tate.org.uk/art/art-terms/g/grattage

    I don't know why we're looking at the big carved face in your composition (what does it mean and why is Ernst/You making it central to the composition)? In terms of the actual composition, it's difficult to read spatially. Some of this is because, as you say, it's unfinished, but I'm going to push you to engage with your artist more convincingly - to show your understanding of him and to apply it in your image making. It's not that I don't like your 'mushroom buildings' - I just don't understand from where or what they've derived.

    In terms of your orthographs etc and general level of professionalism, it's all much too slapdash, and I want you to look at these OGRs so you can get a clear sense of where the level is regarding course expectations and what other students are pushing for:

    https://megan-robson.blogspot.co.uk/2017/11/what-if-metropolis-ogr-part-2.html
    http://jean-est.blogspot.co.uk/2017/11/the-what-if-metropolis-ogr-part-2.html

    I want you to focus on the clear relationship between artist research, design and outcome. I want a better understanding of your understanding of your collaborator and I want to see how that understanding is playing out in terms of your design. I know I must sound like a parrot, but the challenge of this project is exactly this.

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    1. George_AL24 November 2017 at 08:47

      Thanks for the feedback I'll take this into account. I think with the little time I had due to having to restart the final concept I was rushing to get it done. What I'll be doing now is going back to this idea and applying the same painting techniques that Ernst uses and changing the composition taking out a somethings and putting others in. A version 2 so to speak and I'll be working on new orthographics to make them more professional.

      Thanks Phil

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